Bullying in The School - Rohandi Yusuf (1788203012)
The
school will be ashamed and spoil the good name of the school. Like cases of
intimidation on July 14, 2018, a video of an outstanding female student was
intimidated by school children. the intimidating children must take
responsibility with the applicable law in the school so that the violation is
punished until sentenced to leave the school.
If
not released from school there will be many bully victims and will be sustained.
Like one of the 11th grade students of SMAN 3 Setiabudi Jakarta who
was bullied by his senior. So the school must act decisively to students who try to
do rounding
If the bullies are maintained even
though he has changed and done good, the victim will still feel trauma. Like
the case in one of the school in Pangkal Pinang, the province of Bangka
Belitung, the bullies were only sanctioned by 75 points and parents’
The conclusion is that the perpetrators of bullying must get
strict punishment. Because bullying can make the victim experience a great
trauma.
I think bullying in the school very quickly problem solve in the core.
BalasHapusBecause when is don't give very hard punishment can to be nam and reputation school to be crash and bad.
Hallo cup,,
BalasHapusI think that your essay complete of thesis statement and your conclusion and you have data in your essay
i think your title is not describe what you explain on your essay. and there is no thesis statement i think. your paragraph also not unity and coherence
BalasHapuswhy the data is at the beginning of the paragraph even though this is argument, according me that the data is entered after the writing of the argument.
BalasHapusI think your essay is a little confusing, becaus I see that it supports with an irrelevant title.
BalasHapusI think your essay not clear and not complete because your essay only 4 paragraph. And I also confused when I read your essay,
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BalasHapusI think your title is too general, and your essay component is incomplete.
Hi bro. Sory, are you copas this essay? Because I see that your punctuation is very bad. And your thesis statement, supporting idea and conclution is not clearly, it's make us confused.
BalasHapusThe data from your essay is not strong enough, when you say in the conclusion that the bully should get punishment is it under the law or ?
BalasHapusNot good
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